The really irksome bit it just that it’s all so dull and pointless. What, I think, she means to say is that the two works she’s comparing are different because they each are influenced by the different cultural value systems whence they emerge. [Or "from which they emerge," if you find "whence" too archaic.]

Why not just say so? That’s only one sentence, and it avoids making dubious claims like that “England was [...] very proper” or that violence was “necessary [...] for their American counterparts.”

And whenever I see someone cobble together a list of influences that includes “politics, religion, and society,” I feel the bile begin to rise.

“Society.” Dude. Be. More. Specific.

So that’s my beef with this passage. I admit it’s not as funny as some of the lummox writing I have posted in the past, but this is a clever class. So I guess I oughtn’t complain.

If it’s not too much of an ask; do you think you could explain precisely what’s wrong with the passage. Me being a “pitiable” engineer, I’d be interested in what’s what word-wise.